Monday, May 17, 2010

Poetry

Well, I've decided to start putting some of my poetry on my blog in the hopes that people will read and comment on them. Wishful thinking, right?

I'm hoping that people will see my poems and think about what they mean, also. So here's my first. It's titled...

Don't Feel

When you're sad, don't be sad.
When you're glad, don't be glad.
Don't feel at all, don't be human.
And when you're mad... Confused...
Switch out your mask.
Put on a shadow so they see right past you.
What are emotions but weaknesses
that tear away at our souls.
Just a way to mess with us, use us, lose us.
So don't feel at all.


Let me know what you think.

2 comments:

  1. I think this is very good. Personally I would consider taking out the second sad and glad, it sounds a little repetitive. Also think about taking the word "out" out. Just have "switch your mask". This is really good. Do you have more?

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  2. I remember when you sent this to me. I thought it was so expressive. but so upsetting at the same time because I knew this is what you really thought... I also remember wishing that I could write like this again, and so I tried and ended up having a new notebook full of my own poetry. maybe we can trade sometime?

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